Talk:Fender Contempo Organ/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 06:34, 13 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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You could incorporate some of the product's features in the lead.
I've added a bit, though at 3,600 characters of prose (a point I raised at WT:GAN), there probably doesn't warrant more than a sentence.
"$(5,900" → Why's the dollar sign outside the parentheses?
Formatting error
Link: octave, tone, vibrato

Okay with the latter two, but I think "octave" qualifies as "the names of subjects with which most readers will be at least somewhat familiar" as seen in MOS:OVERLINK.

tremolo and vibrato should be italicized.
Are you sure about that? Hammond organ (a longstanding GA that has also seen significant editing since) doesn't do this.
Tremolo is currently linked at second mention.
Fixed
"axis tone\volume" → Is the backslash intended?
No, it's my ham-fisted typing, probably :-)
"in Miles Davis group" → You're inconsistent with the use of "Miles Davis group" and "the Miles Davis group". Also, if you use the former, it should be " in Miles Davis' group"
I think per the principles set out in WP:DUH, "the album" gets the point across equally well and side-steps this issue.
"Live-Evil" → Italicize.
Done, per MOS:ALBUM
Images are fine.
Spot-checks on ref 5 (Combo Organ Heaven) support the claims made, but what makes this a reliable source (seems like a personal blog). AryKun (talk) 06:34, 13 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
See the discussion at Wikipedia:Reliable sources/Noticeboard/Archive 371#Combo Organ Heaven. Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 12:41, 13 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, the image licensing is fine, could use alt text though (not needed at GA level).
I'll be passing this article as it meets all the criteria and I can't see any other issues. AryKun (talk) 08:22, 14 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I can never remember how to put alts in inboxes; somebody must know. I'd ask RexxS but he's no longer around. Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 09:21, 14 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]