Talk:Battle of Trenton/GA1
GA Review[edit]
This article does not meet the Good Article criteria and has therefore failed. Issues include:
- Second and third paragraph of " Background" is unreferenced
- First and second paragraph of "Hessian Moves" is unreferenced
- Second paragraph of "The Crossing and March" is unreferenced
- First and fourth paragraph of "The Battle" is unreferenced
- First paragraph of " Aftermath" is unreferenced
- Entire " Legacy" section is unreferenced
- References are not formatted according to WP:CITE/ES.
- Bullet points needed for "See also"
- " References" should be in alphabetical order by last name
Once these issues have been resolved, please renominate the article. Gary King (talk) 17:57, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
- References still need to be formatted per WP:CITE/ES. Gary King (talk) 19:31, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
- Hi, please keep future messages here so everything is in one spot :) Anyways, the required components of every URL reference is title, URL, publisher, and access date. {{cite web}} can help with this so you don't have to type out all of the formatting by hand. Gary King (talk) 23:14, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
Okay.
- Please unify the page number references. "Fischer p.538" – p. is used but "Brooks, Hohwald (1999) pg.56" – pg. is used. Choose one and go with that.
- "up,"." – remove the comma
- "west. [7] A third" → "west.[7] A third" – remove the spaces before footnotes per WP:FN
Gary King (talk) 02:49, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
- "up"." → "up."" – move the punctuation per WP:PUNC
- Several references are used multiple times. Use reference names (WP:REFNAME) to merge them together.
- "See also" section goes before "Footnotes" per WP:LAYOUT
- I suggest adding a reference to the end of every paragraph so I can see that everything is clearly referenced.
Gary King (talk) 05:01, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
Alright, great!
- Could the lead be expanded to better summarize the entire article, per WP:LEAD?
- up."" – has double quotes at the end
- "doubts, he wrote" – disconnected sentences here; either use a semicolon or a period
Gary King (talk) 19:41, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
- "school schild in the"
- "to this day" – try to avoid dated terms. Probably best to remove this.
- link dates like "December 23" if dates are to be linked in this article; be consistent, per WP:DATE.
- for times like "y 12 AM[16] until 3 AM, and", use the 12:00 a.m. format per WP:DATE.
Gary King (talk) 20:23, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
I believe I got everything. Red4tribe (talk) 20:36, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
- "The Battle's legacy lives on, as almost any school child in the United States could tell you about Washington's victory." – doesn't seem very encyclopedic, especially "could tell you", since this isn't really a narration
- "this crucial American victory." – crucial seems a bit POV, perhaps remove that one word
- "Prior to the battle, American morale was at an all time low." – "all-time", and that also doesn't seem very encyclopedic. Was it proven that their morale was at all "all-time low"?
- I think generally the entire article needs its prose reworked.
Gary King (talk) 20:49, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
- i would move the boat talk up to crossing section - Durham boat
- add something about the marblehead regiment 114th Continental Regiment
- 'victory or death' is from cato Joseph Addison
- i would incorporate the myth in the body as fact with explanation