Talk:BAC TSR-2/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk) 01:03, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

Another great British aircraft saga, like Comet -- how can I resist? Will get on to this in earnest in over the next week -- initial comment though is that for an article of this size, the lead needs to be a bit longer, at least two paragraphs. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 01:03, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

Good suggestion, done! FWiW Bzuk (talk) 16:37, 22 November 2010 (UTC).

Okay, now that we've got De Havilland Comet out of the way, I think we can all concentrate on this! Will get on to a detailed review shortly... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:43, 6 December 2010 (UTC)

By the way, like the re-vamped lead -- nice and punchy, manages to get some complex points across in a straightforward manner without over-simplifying things. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk)

Technical review

• Pls fix following dab links:
  • Hawker
  • IFF
  • Test Pilot
• Pls check the External Links tool at above right for a few warning messages.

• I adjusted and updated the ext. links. But am still getting a warning for the naa.gov.au link (last one). -fnlayson (talk) 16:46, 7 December 2010 (UTC) Removed

GOR.339

• Last sentence of first para needs citation.

Submissions

• Last sentence of last para needs citation.

Mission

• Last sentence of last para needs citation.

Design

• Pls deal with the 'page needed' tag. Replaced
• Last sentence of last para needs citation.

Testing

• "16 million" what -- I assume pounds but pls specify.

Project cancellation

• Last sentence of last para needs citation.

General

• Performed a light copyedit but overall it looks good, well-written/structured/illustrated. I'll place on hold and let you get on with the above items before I check image licensing, refs, and external links.Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:22, 7 December 2010 (UTC)

• Looks like Bzuk and others have taken care of all the issues identified. Anything that was missed or needs addressing? Thanks. -fnlayson (talk) 18:58, 13 December 2010 (UTC)

• Tks, was away from internet for a few days but will return to this review shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:48, 14 December 2010 (UTC)

• Okay, checked image licensing and refs, as well as changes since my last read-through and, apart from the need for a very minor copyedit, it all looked good so happy to pass as GA -- well done all. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:57, 18 December 2010 (UTC)