Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Qalaherriaq/archive1

Qalaherriaq

Qalaherriaq (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

As of 3 June 2024, 05:39 (UTC), this page is active and open for discussion. An FAC coordinator will be responsible for closing the nomination.

• Featured article candidates/Qalaherriaq/archive1

Nominator(s): Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 22:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

This article is on Qalaherriaq (AKA Erasmus Augustine Kallihirua and many, many other names), a young Inughuit lad who served as a interpreter (after an essential abduction) in the 1850s, converted to Christianity, and tragically died at around 22. This was my first article in a series on Inuit interpreters. I have tried to squeeze as much as I can out of these sources, and it's the kind of story I'd like to run at TFA down the line :3 Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 22:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

Image review

• Why two copies of the same image?

• File:Qalaherriaq, 1850s, Inughuit hunt (cropped).jpg is missing alt text

• File:Qalaherriaq_signature.svg needs a US tag. Ditto File:Qalaherriaq,_1850s,_Inughuit_hunt_(cropped).jpg, File:Qalaherriaiq_map.jpg, File:Qalaherriaq,_Buried_Esquimaux.jpg. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:54, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
  • Alrighty, licensing and alt-text should all be fixed. I originally had two of the same because I wanted to show both angles of the double-portrait but also thought the front-facing was the best image of him... but I was able to find a good-quality scan of an 1855 drawing of him, and that I think is a step up. Generalissima (talk) (it/she)

• • • When and where was File:Qalaherriaq_signature.svg first published? Ditto File:Qalaherriaiq_map.jpg. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:48, 22 May 2024 (UTC)

    Signature is from a letter which was later stored in archives, which I guess counts as unpublished. The map I realize was not included in the book about the subject and is also unpublished. Corrected this. Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 06:48, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

sawyer777's comments

will be back later; ping me if i seem to have forgotten about it! ... sawyer * he/they * talk 05:59, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

• (in Wolstenholme Fjord section) especially during an era marked by severe hardship for the Inughuit. some context may do well here - what was particularly hard about this era, compared to other periods of Greenlandic history? ... sawyer * he/they * talk 08:01, 25 May 2024 (UTC)
• A short biography, Kalli, the Esquimaux Christian, was published by Reverend Murray in 1857, becoming the main primary source on Qalaherriaq's life. i'd like to hear a little more about this biography, if there's more to write about it - what kind of impact did it have? how did it reflect the relationship between Murray & Qalaherriaq? ... sawyer * he/they * talk 03:26, 26 May 2024 (UTC)
• The crew encountered several abandoned igluit at the site of Uummannaq, now Pituffik. Inside one igloo, the crew found a heaped pile of seven bodies, the survivors were assumed to have fled the area without burying the dead due to an epidemic. presumably the seven bodies were victims of the epidemic, but this definitely took me a second to figure out, especially as the immediate context is looking for victims of a violent massacre. edit: it's also a comma splice ... sawyer * he/they * talk 03:28, 26 May 2024 (UTC)

Comments by Pickersgill-Cunliffe

• Suggest including the "HMS" in the ship links, looks awkward splitting it up
  • Fixed. - G
• Forsyth was a commander, not a captain
  • Fixed. - G
• A word or two introducing what Prince Albert and Assistance were doing in the area when first mentioned would be useful. They're currently thrown into the text a little haphazardly
• John Ross should be Sir John Ross - also maybe a word to note that he wasn't actually part of this official search party?
• The text raises some confusion over the different groups of ships looking for Franklin. Initial reading suggests that Penny and the Assistance groups (you should also note who was leading this, because it's currently unclear with the first mention of senior officers being both Forsyth and Ommanney) were separate, but we then get "Ommanney and Petersen returned..." which suggests otherwise. The text should more obviously explain the makeup of this group of ships, what it was doing and who was a part of it
• Considering there's no link, a word or two prefacing what exactly Prince Albert is would be useful
  • Fixed. - G
• "Snow's" - give his full name and explain who he is, why should the reader find his account impactful?
  • Done. - G
• Link brigs
  • Done. -G
• Per above, if you're going to preface a ship with its type then do that for all of them
  • Okay, done. - G
• Suggest redlinking ship names where appropriate, e.g. HMS Sophia
  • Done. - G
• Do we know anything about Lady Franklin? She isn't showing up in any of my lists of Royal Navy ships
  • Ah, she's not Royal Navy it turns out! Private ship built for the purpose. Corrected. - G
• "the life of the party" is there a particular person attributed to this quote?
• "and do not reflect"
• Link midshipman
  • Corrected. - G
• "an Assistance midshipman" suggests there were others, when actually Markham was the only one in the expedition
  • Oh, good point. Corrected. - G
• "of the Franklin expedition"
  • Fixed. - G
• "Qalaherriaq was placed in St Augustine's College"
  • Fixed. - G
• "Qalaherriaq had suffered"
  • Fixed. -G
• "Captain Ommanney"
  • Fixed. - G
• Split out the links for Edward Feild and Bishop of Newfoundland
  • Fixed. - G
• Suggest adding a conversion for the £25
  • Added. - G
• "Memorial University.)" Move full stop outside of bracket
  • Good catch, fixed. - G

Some initial comments here. I will look to come back at a later date for another read through. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:11, 23 May 2024 (UTC)