Talk:Jack jumper ant/GA2
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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 22:47, 6 October 2015 (UTC)
Comments by Dunkleosteus77[edit]
I've only read up to the Behaviour and ecology section, so I'll be back with more comments.
- Thanks for initiating the review. This is the only GA nominee I have managed to not pass, so I will be glad to see this article promoted this time.
- Congratulations on promoting yet another article to GA status Dunkleosteus77 (push to talk) 14:54, 13 October 2015 (UTC)
- As always, thank you for initiating the review. It's finally good to see this article reach GA status, a goal I intended for: for almost a year. Burklemore1 (talk) 16:06, 13 October 2015 (UTC)
- Congratulations on promoting yet another article to GA status Dunkleosteus77 (push to talk) 14:54, 13 October 2015 (UTC)
General comments[edit]
- Is this written in Australian English? If so, add the template {{Australian English}} to the article's talk page
Done.
- "The queen, measures..." in the lead, take out the comma
Done.
- "...kill other insects by with injecting venom", in the lead, take out "with"?
Done.
- "...meaning 'covered with hair, especially soft hair' " in the Taxonomy section, take out "especially soft hair"
Done.
- You don't have to say "The species is a member of the genus Myrmecia, a part of the subfamily Myrmeciinae", in the Taxonomy section, in the third paragraph because it already explains it in the first
I have only seen this once.
- "...and less common in urban areas", in the Distribution and habitat section, add the word "are" after "and"
Done.
- You contradict yourself when you say "Jack jumper ants live in open habitats..." and then say "They often reside in damp areas, such as forests..."
Done.
- When you say "open forest", do you mean "dry forest"?
I think they are two different things, unless we can say "dry open forests"?
- Eh, done anyway. Dunkleosteus77, just tagging you here because I'm not sure if you have forgotten about this review. Burklemore1 (talk) 04:39, 13 October 2015 (UTC)
Other comments[edit]
- Shouldn't Historical treatment be a subheading under Interactions with humans?
Done.
- Is this about a species or species group? If it is a species group, add a table or a list of the species of jack jumper ants in the Taxonomy section.
M. pilosula is a distinct species, the group was named after it.
Final comments[edit]
- There are two sections on treatment, try merging those, or merge Historical treatment into History
Done.
- The Prognosis section basically talks about the milder reaction to the stings, try merging it with Signs and symptoms
Done.
- In Historical treatment, I don't think "Indigenous" should be capitalized
Done.
- Add {{Main|Ant venom}} to the Venom section
Done.