Talk:Pure (Miller novel)/GA1
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Reviewer: Maclean25 (talk · contribs) 00:38, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
- Good article review (see Wikipedia:What is a good article? for criteria)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Three images: File:Andrew Miller - Pure.jpg tagged as fair use; File:Saints Innocents 1550 Hoffbauer NoFrame.jpg & File:Goya - Caprichos (43) - Sleep of Reason.jpg both Commons-hosted and tagged public domain.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
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- Comments/Questions
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- Firstly, thanks for the review!
- 1a. In Plot, "overflow into the neighbouring houses." - I'm unclear on this. How does a cemetery overflow?
- Clarified to The cemetery has been in use for many years but, given the number of people buried in such a small area, the bodies are no longer decomposing properly. They have begun to overflow and fall into the neighbouring houses as greater excavations take place and basement walls are weakened.
- 1a. In Plot, "and that things might not appear to be as simple as he first imagined." - this is a plot teaser. Just provide a plot summary, do not be concerned with spoilers (Wikipedia:Spoiler).
- Amended to He finds resistance from all sides, notably Ziguette who strikes Baratte during his sleep in opposition to his work.
- 2b. In Development, "Miller was "taken by the theatricality" of it..." - this quote should have a citation attached to it.
- This was supported by the guardian interview against the following sentence. I've stuck it here also.
- 2b. In Reception, there seems to be difference between a quote and its source material:
- Article "Miller intimately and pacily imagines..."
- Source "Miller intimately imagines..." [1]
- This is actually as originally published, but as I couldn't find "pacily" in my OED I emailed them and they corrected! I forgot to update in the article also. Now done.
- 3b/4. In Awards and nominations, the quote from McCrum is going too far. It is a harsh criticism of someone else's judgment and, by extension, an award. It is ok to say that the absence of several books (including Pure) from the long-list led McCrum to criticize the editorial judgment of the judges, but using an extended harshly worded quote is being overly defensive (POV) and unfocused (too much emphasis).
- Agreed and removed.
- 1b. The lead can be expanded. It should be a stand-alone summary of the article but there doesn't appear to be anything regarding the Development or Reception sections. It could also give a more clear explanation of the plot. Also, the cites in the lead are unnecessary because that info is already cited properly in the article's body.
- Shall work on this today... (though would welcome some help!)