Talk:1925 Florida tropical storm/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 22:55, 9 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lede
  • "...the storm further strengthened into a hurricane before striking central Florida on December 1." - Wikilink "Florida"
  • "On December 5, the system is believed to have dissipated offshore." - Sounds like a personally opinion, like someone said "I believe that the system dissipated on December 5". You should probably revise to something like this: "On December 5, the system was presumed to have dissipated offshore."
  • "Property damage amounted to $3 million, $1 million of which was in Jacksonville." - Add inflation templates to $3 million and $1 million
Meteorological history
  • "The 1925 Florida hurricane was first identified on November 27, 1925 as a tropical depression situated to the southeast of the Yucatán Peninsula, nearly a month after the official end of the hurricane season." - First, erase "1925", since it would be obvious that this system formed in 1925. On the second part of this sentence, I don't think that a hurricane season in 1925 was June 1 - November 30, and BTW, November 27 is actually three days before the official end of hurricane season, and not "nearly a month" later. \
    • The 1925 has to be there as a formality (MOS) and at the time, hurricane season ended in October, not November :) Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:20, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the first paragraph, delink "Cuba" and "landfall", since they are already linked in the lede.
    • Links go by section rather than the entire article from what I've gathered. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:20, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Impact
  • "...only 0.22 in (5.58 mm) of rain fell in the city." - Wikilink inches and millimetres
  • Add inflation templates to the following money values under the first paragraph of United States: $200,000, $3 million, $1 million, $600,000, and $250,000.
  • In that same paragraph, delink "Jacksonville"
  • "A ship named the American SS Catopazi sank between Charleston, South Carolina and the northern coast of Cuba, with all 30 crew members lost." - Do you mean sank while sailing between Charleston, South Carolina and the northern coast of Cuba, because it sounds like it could have sank over Florida.
    • Unless you're thinking the ship was sailing over land, it's assumed to be over water. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:20, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the last paragraph, delink "Cape Hatteras"
References
  • On reference #2, the date is incorrect, it reads 1993, but it should say January 21, 2010.
    • It was changed after a wrote the article and implemented that reference. Updated it though. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:20, 11 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • On reference #6, the accessdate reads "January 2, 1925", do you mean January 2, 2011?
  • Most references that are written by Associated Press say "The Associated Press", which is not the correct name.
Summary
Good job, you have either addressed or fix my issues, so therefore, I am passing this article for GA. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 22:31, 12 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]