Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Ludwig Ernst von Brunswick-Lüneburg-Bevern
Ludwig Ernst von Brunswick-Lüneburg-Bevern[edit]
Any suggestions for bringing this article up from B (which it easily reached) to GA? Neddyseagoon - talk 16:08, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
Cla68[edit]
A few suggestions:
- Expand the intro by one more paragraph so it summarizes in slightly more detail the entire article.
- Instead of using "he" to refer to the article's subject as often, try using Ludwig at least every other time, and especially at the beginning of a section.
- I think you could change the "family" section title to "origin" or "birth" so that it will appear that you have more information on his early life.
- I think you have too many one paragraph sections. Whenever possible sections should contain at least two paragraphs. Perhaps some of them could be combined.
- I would suggest having a citation in at least every paragraph, preferably at the end of the paragraph, even if it's the same citation for the following paragraph.
- The grammer needs going over again, there are some problems. For example, "according to some with the intention restraining William's older sister Carolina" and "It is not impossibly that Ludwig had an influence in bringing prince William V"
All in all, very good work on the article. Cla68 23:16, 28 September 2007 (UTC)
Roger Davies[edit]
My concerns echo Cla68's. The biggest current problem is the inadequate referencing, which is an absolute bar to further progress. (You will see that it fails B-class for the same reason.) Otherwise, a comprehensive and broadly well-written piece. --ROGER DAVIES TALK 10:32, 29 September 2007 (UTC)